I could hear the strong waves as I rode against
the rough mountains, struggling to get through.
The bike’s wheels pumping through as best as it could.
Hopping on one wheel the bike just made it over the river.
You could hear the bike thumping hard on the ground,
I could also smell the salt water. I could feel the cold
weather it felt like i was on a cold mountain with basically
no clothing.
The bike was going as fast as a cheetah storming through the wind.
Then suddenly I made it to the beach and to make it there i
needed to go over a fence so i remembered that i have had lots
of experience flipping over fences i remember that to get over
i need to be in a perfect angle and go to it with the right
amount of speed. I rode to it just like I've been taught and
whoosh i just made it over with a thump and a bump then i
made it to the beach with the beautiful ocean ahead.
We are learning to make our writing as interesting as possible by adding what we hear, feel, see and taste and by adding our punctuation is well.
Then suddenly I made it to the beach and to make it there i
needed to go over a fence so i remembered that i have had lots
of experience flipping over fences i remember that to get over
i need to be in a perfect angle and go to it with the right
amount of speed. I rode to it just like I've been taught and
whoosh i just made it over with a thump and a bump then i
made it to the beach with the beautiful ocean ahead.
We are learning to make our writing as interesting as possible by adding what we hear, feel, see and taste and by adding our punctuation is well.
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