Friday 19 February 2021

Butterflies

Text Title: Butterflies
Text Type: Narrative
Text Creator: Patricia Grace
Text Purpose: To inform us about what happened inside of the Butterflies book.
Date: 12 February 2021

Butterflies
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Patricia Grace

The grandmother plaited her granddaughter's hair and then she said, Get your lunch. Put it in your bag. Get your apple. You come back straight after school, straight home here. Listen to the teacher, she said. "Do what she say? 

Her grandfather was out on the step. He walked down the path with her and out on to the footpath. He said to a neighbour, 'Our granddaughter goes to school. She lives with us now. 'She's fine,' the neighbour said. “She's terrific with her two plaits in her hair

'And clever,' the grandfather said. Writes every day in her book! 'She's fine,' the neighbour said. 

The grandfather waited with his granddaughter by the crossing and then he said, 'Go to school.
Listen to the teacher. Do what she say

When the granddaughter came home from school her grandfather was hoeing round the cabbages. Her grandmother was picking beans. They stopped their work

'You bring your book home?' the grandmother asked. 'Yes.' 'You write your story?' 'Yes. 'What's your story?' 'About the butterflies 'Get your book, then. Read your story 

The granddaughter took her book from her schoolbag and opened itI killed all the butterflies,' she read. This is me and this is all the butterflies

'And your teacher like your story, did she?' 'I don't know. 'What your teacher say?

'She said butterflies are beautiful creatures. They hatch out and fly in the sun. The butterflies visit all the pretty flowers, she said. They lay their eggs and then they die. You don't kill butterflies, that's what she said 

The grandmother and grandfather were quiet for a long time, and their granddaughter, holding the book, stood quite still in the warm garden. 'Because you see,' the grandfather said, 'your teacher, she buy all her cabbages from the supermarket and that's why Reflection Section- The Grandaughters' hair got plated by their grandmother and the grandmother told her to "grab her lunch that was already set and go to school after school go straight back home" The grandmother told once she started to leave to "Listen to the teacher" The Grandfather was waiting for his grandaughter out on the step to walk her on the footpath on the way to the granddaughter school, Later they encountered their neighbour and the grandfather was just telling him basically how perfect his granddaughter was. She went to school and was set to a task to write about butterflies. She went back home and saw her grandfather was hoeing

round the cabbages and her grandmother was picking beans. She showed her story to her grandparents and they had a question about her story because she decided to kill the butterflies in the story. Her teacher didn't like her story because it had violence and because the teacher actually liked butterflies. You can understand that people's grammar in this story isn't the best because maybe English isn't their first language and they're probably from a different country.

1 comment:

  1. Hi Kaedun, I like your post on your reflection section on Butterflies. It's great that you included the text with a reference on who it was written by. But, why did you rewrite the whole text when that's not part - you need to have a statement that includes the text, give evidence and give an explanation/justification of the text. Also, you need to summarise the text in a few sentences. One last thing, you need to answer the question you've chosen from the matrix.

    I look forward to reading your next post.

    Khush

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